So, as promised, I read the first chapter, and here are my thoughts:
The idea seems nice, and I like the somewhat confusing opener, it keeps the reader intrigued.
But.
You seriously need to check up on your grammar, sentence structure and overall logical writing
if you intend to keep writing in English. There are loads of mistakes, loads of things that doesn't
make any sense, and loads of things that feels either excessive, or straight out completely
misplaced. As an example, there is the tense problem I mentioned in chat.
Furthermore, your main character doesn't make much sense at all. For a person that gets transported
from his kitchen to a swamp with absolutely no explanation, he's rather calm. He has a calm and near
non-caring attitude toward corpses and dead people, and apparently the only thing that can really scare
him is a giant spider. But it doesn't scare him for long, as you suddenly just stop the entire chase,
so abruptly that I had to go back and see if I missed something. But no, one moment he's running for
his life, and the next he is admiring the sky, it's very choppy and very weirdly paced. He also ponders
on the weirdest of things and as he openly admits himself "he's not a very clever man."
I don't like him, he's not very believable, not very likeable, and not at all interesting enough. A main
character needs to be at least one of these things to hold a reader's interest. I really advice you work
on your character design and consider more closely the actions of the characters in the future.
I'm really sorry, but most of what I read really has a very "awkward" feel about it, it's not particularly
funny, it's not particularly exciting, and it's not particularly well written. I think you should, instead of
pouring out more chapters, go back and focus on the chapters you have already written, go over the
grammar, go over the structure, go through the sequences and ask yourself "are these believable?"
"Would a character like this react to this like that?" "Is this a necessary detail?"
Don't just write to write, let it make sense, let it convey meaning.